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MemoriesI lie awake staring to the sky, Watching as life passes by, Counting the minutes to a new day, Watching the clock tick away.Memories
I remember the good times and the bad, I remember the times where I felt so sad. Playing in the park and never being alone, Than cutting my wrists when I no one was home.
I think of the bad and some of the good, Thinking of my broken childhood, Thinking of dying before the end of year six, My mind breaking down and my heart playing tricks.
I remember lying awake my eyes full of fear, I felt alone yet I shed not a si
by ~beauty-in
She Lies BrokenShe lies broken, Alone on the floor, Tears down her cheeks, Blood on the floor.She Lies Broken
Broken bleeding wrists , A Shattered torn heart, Losing it all and giving up, Afraid to make a new start.
She lies broken, No one seems to care, Her wrists are torn up, She's fallen off her chair.
Her bestfriend calls, She doesn't pick up the phone, She lies broken, And she's all alone.
Her daddy comes home, And he unlocks the door, He see's her broken, Bleeding on the floor.
She lies broken, She didn't se
by ~beauty-in
SickI knew I was in love, The day that I cried, From all the joy and hope, Bursting out from insde.Sick
I knew that I loved him, When I refused to let go, Even though he acted cruel, And he had no love to show.
I knew I was in love, When I began to feel sick, When he wasn't near me, Even when he was being a prick.
I knew I was in love, When I accepted his mistakes, And no matter what he did, My heart just didnt seem to break.
by ~beauty-in
I Don't Want To ApologiseI don't want to say I'm sorry, I don't want to beg on my knees, For your love and exceptance, I just want to do what I please.I Don't Want To Apologise
I don't want to be your shadow, I don't want to be a nurse, Your seriously breaking me down, And your anger is making it worse,
I'm this close to breaking down, I'm this close to losing it all, I'm this close to falling down. And you wont catch me when I fall...
I've wished upon every star, And blown out every light, Just to get you to notice, That I'm an eagle about to take flight.
I'm not going
by ~beauty-in
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- Current Residence: Hell
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- Favourite movie: The Ring and The Craft
- Favourite band or musician: Evanescence
- Favourite genre of music: Rock
- Favourite poet or writer: Theres to many too say.....
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LaUz
embrace ur inner freak
ps: koal thanx for your comments greatly apreciated
Anyways, I think that your poem is fine for you age, as you said in one of your responses to someone, you never said it was original. When everyone starts anything creative it is not original, because we haven't grown and done it enough. We start with what is familar and reword it.
To become better writers we practice like everything else. I myself have writtin and lot more crap than good poetry, I think some of the stuff I am writing now is alright, but it still needs improvement.
I think it is cool and brave to get you peotry up here, if you would like a comment from me that might help you with you poetry, I suggest first checking out a poem of mine to see if you think I can write alright, and then just let me know the poem. I will be more then happy to give you some helpful critizim (spelled correctly of course).
Chow for now!
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